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Prison Camp
Author: John Tofte
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(Added on Feb 11, 2004)
(This month 45658 readers) (Total 89995 readers) |
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A young woman working as a guid in a North African vacation center, is arrestet and unjustly sent to a chaingang in a stone quarry for life. |
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Average (?):  (5.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Apr 12, 2007 |
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you really need to re read the synopsis. it is all spelled wrong, or most of the words are (5/10)
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makito
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Jul 26, 2005 |
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Excellent work. Please continue. Thanks. (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
mickni2000
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Nov 21, 2004 |
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I think it is a nice story you have written. I love prison stories. I'm from Scandinavia too and I have uploaded two stories this site.
I really think you should continue and combine the hard labour work with punishment blocks for prison sluts not fulfilling the expectations of the wardens and maybe just as an excuse to abuse the prisoners for all kinds of experimental sexual acts with no limits at all. (9/10)
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chksng19
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Oct 21, 2004 |
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There is a story hiding below all the bad grammar and misspellings. There are many willing editors in the Forum; take advantage of their help and your story will take off.
As it stands, it is unreadable. (2/10)
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C_Lakewood
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Oct 19, 2004 |
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Even if the author's native language is not
English, as some reviewers have speculated, he
should be able to run a spell-check.
"Four matrons had been bussy beating them with
their canes, as they draged the heavy cart up
the long steap sloap."
Indeed.
(2/10)
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| Reviewer:
mickydoughty
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Oct 19, 2004 |
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Again the spelling could put off some readers, but it shouldn't distract them from reading such a flair of originaility. I've read too many stories where the characters are whipped and worked hard, not allowed to wash and still have the apperance of super models. Its about time stories reflected the fact that if you play or are forced to play dirty then you are going to be unclean. keep up the good work, hopefully if theres a few more chapters soon, to keep up the momentum. (8/10)
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mstrger
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Jun 9, 2004 |
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Yeah I really liked this story. Hope theres more (8/10)
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Wyn
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Feb 17, 2004 |
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As the author has said, this is just the beginning of what is hopefully a lengthier story. I do hope that he is not discouraged by the low ratings and continues to post more. Like Grey Slayer said, English may not be the author's native tongue, and I can overlook the spelling and grammatical errors. Unfortunately, there were parts where the repetition had me thinking, yes, you've told us this already. (5/10)
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Grey Slayer
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Feb 16, 2004 |
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It is obvious that the author's native tongue is not English, and there are many grammatical errors. But the setting of the story (women's prison labor camp) and the details the author uses (cheap rubber boots for footwear, and the humiating nightly inspections, very close confinement each night) makes this story enjoyable for me. I want the author continue the story. (7/10)
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BlackRad!sh
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Feb 13, 2004 |
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I tried, I honestly did, because the concept was interesting. The close repetition of phrases, along with massive grammar issues, kept me from being able to get anywhere in the tale. My advice to the author is to get someone else to edit this story and then repost it. (2/10)
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bdsmbill
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Feb 12, 2004 |
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I should have followed Powerone and skipped this. Not erotic at all and poorly written as well. (2/10)
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Spitman
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Feb 12, 2004 |
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Dreadful English, but there is a story in there somewhere, with a good bit of descriptive detail. The theme is reminiscent of F.E. Campbell, although far rougher in tone, softening only to describe the relationship between the two girls. The detail has an authentic ring to it, but is far too rough to be regarded as erotic. (2/10)
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matwey
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Feb 12, 2004 |
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I fully agree with mickydoughty:
baldshaven white girls working as chain convicts for life in an African stone quarry, heavy chains, cruel guards, mercyless sun - yeaaaaah, I love it! C'mon, John Tofte, give us more of this stuff!
And to powerone: Not everybody is a native speaker in English. I am not, and actually I suppose, neither is John Tofte. Would you prefer him to write - without misspellings! - in his native language which could be Kalmykian or Lithuanian, leaving you to make your own translation with babelfish translator??? - Good luck, my friend! (9/10)
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mickydoughty1
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Feb 12, 2004 |
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I wasn't put off by the spelling at all, and getting beyond opened up an interesting story. I love this theme (women in prison) and can't get enough, so this was right up my street. This is obviously the introduction to as you put it a much longer story. I think if you produce a few more chapters and get it out for reading you may have some followers, as this is definantly going in my bookshelf. (7/10)
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Powerone
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Feb 11, 2004 |
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Sorry, but with 3 misspellings out of 27 words in the synopsis, I refuse to even open the story. (2/10)
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