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Sexy Revenage
Author: Alwayshorney20
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(Added on Feb 7, 2006)
(This month 8465 readers) (Total 18635 readers) |
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This story is about a women seeking revenge on her husban. |
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Average (?):  (2/10) |
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| Reviewer:
bracemaiden
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Feb 17, 2006 |
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There are many opportunities for improvement. I would suggest using a checker before posting chapter 2. The checker can improve your writing skills dramatically, or even give a fresh perspective. Break up the sentences more.
"Writing skills bordering on illiteracy" is the definition of a 1. This was above that. (2/10)
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Mad Lews
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Feb 12, 2006 |
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Story? we don need no stinkin story. But then it's only chapter one and it could always get better
(2/10)
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csr
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Feb 8, 2006 |
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This is the best story I've ever read.
LOL!!!!! (1/10)
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isabeau
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Feb 8, 2006 |
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well i usually only write positive things also but wtf? i'm wondering if some kid didnt write this story. (1/10)
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shoes
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Feb 8, 2006 |
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worst story ever (1/10)
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jip
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Feb 8, 2006 |
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no comments (1/10)
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Foxysake
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Feb 8, 2006 |
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Horrible, Rewrite and revise is all I can tell u (1/10)
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| Reviewer:
bdanials
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Feb 7, 2006 |
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I usually try to write constructive criticisms in my reviews, but this is the 1 time in 1000 where that is nearly impossible. In the words of my College Writing professor: "WTF?". This story was little more than a long paragraph of run-on sentences which do not form a cohesive thought which could pose as a story. You may want to rewrite this story and make use an editor to make it both readable and look like a story. (1/10)
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yossarian
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Feb 7, 2006 |
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Bilge. Utter bilge. Garbage. Tripe. Nonsense. Your story was bad enough to compel me to login and I only regret there isn't a zero on this scale. (1/10)
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Lady Lance
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Feb 7, 2006 |
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I don't know what that other guy was doing giving your story a 7. At only one extended paragraph, it can't even be called a story! The thing is barely legible and makes no sense whatsoever. Ugh. (1/10)
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Feb 7, 2006 |
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story wasok but in the synopsis you mispeled husband, you left of the "d" at the end (7/10)
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- Replied by:
bracemaiden
(Edit) (Feb 17, 2006)
- Perhaps you missed something. The author "mispeled husband" was the only grammatical error you noticed? Perhaps you've read a few too many tonight!
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