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Amy\'s Story
Author: hurt me
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(Added on Sep 4, 2006)
(This month 85025 readers) (Total 179472 readers) |
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A young nursing student is kidnapped off the street and sold into slavery. This is her story |
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Average (?):  (8.5/10) |
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Rating:  (9/10) |
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| Reviewer:
littleone_
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Nov 23, 2007 |
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I was torn between and a nine and a ten on this review. The story captured me, the author has a good command of the English language and can paint a picture well. The story has a good beginning, middle and even ends at a point that could be called an “Ending” or could be used for a squeal. The fact the this short story has an ending to it is what pushed my review up to a ten. In future stories I’d encourage the author to get more into the girls mind, an ability the author has already demonstrated she has, and to not be scared to flower things up a bit and go into more detail while still keeping the story well paced and moving as she has done here. A good job and I’d love to read more from this author. (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
slv_bea
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Oct 15, 2006 |
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i have to tell you that my Master enjoyed your story much, Sir. he ordered me to tell you, that he liked the way your heroine has to go her way into slavery. though he found the impaling to much he was very aroused and excited by following your heroine into forced deep submission step by step, Sir. he rates your story with a 10, Sir. please excuse my bad English, i am not a native speaker. (10/10)
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- Replied by:
hurt me
(Edit) (Oct 19, 2006)
- ahem, yes, well, thanks to your Master for the review, but i am not male or dominant, just a humble female submissive writing out her own fantasy.
but tell your master I thank him for the rating and the review. Keep reading, there will be more!
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| Reviewer:
BruceCC
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Oct 7, 2006 |
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Chapter three was too brutal for my tastes, but I get the impression that the remainder of the story (as well as the first two chapters) will more civilized. With that in mind I am happy to give this story a nine. After reading future chapters I may even bump my rating up to a ten. This is a great story... thanks for writing it. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
hurt me
(Edit) (Oct 7, 2006)
- It's a brutal world our heroine has been dragged into. That gorey scene was intended to drive the point home not only to Amy, but to the reader as well. However, it won't always be so violent, nor will Amy end up on as dog meat - i hope...
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| Reviewer:
theSnark
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Oct 6, 2006 |
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Well written, not for the squeamish. Will be looking for the rest. (8/10)
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- Replied by:
hurt me
(Edit) (Oct 7, 2006)
- thank you! i do so enjoy gorey scenes, lol! But I find them most effective when used sparingly. Thanks again!
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| Reviewer:
Master_chris
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Oct 2, 2006 |
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a great story, I do love the way you build up a picture of the condictions of the female slave, and on how you are showing us her world. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
hurt me
(Edit) (Oct 2, 2006)
- Thank you very much! There are so many contradictions in the mind of a female slave, especially one that is just becoming a slave. The next chapter will really explore that, here's hoping Amy will succumb - I don't relish the idea of impaling my main character, I've become quite fond of her.
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| Reviewer:
Cagemaster1000
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Sep 30, 2006 |
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Although I'm not an english native and a very good speaker of this language (I'm latin), I must admit that I'm quite impressed by the first chapters. A very promissing story, well structured, nice written (at least until now). I read quite a lot of bdsm stories and even if the subject of your story is quite common, after 15-20 lines I was fascinated by your style of writting. Only a single story impressed me like yours, Sfmaster's : "Janet in training" & its sequel "Janet's ordeal".
Even if your start it's a bit shorty and not that elaborate like the stories I mentioned (that's why I will not give you the max. rating)I hope you'll continue with your work and write the complete saga of slave Amy.
Be inspired !!! :-) (9/10)
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- Replied by:
hurt me
(Edit) (Oct 1, 2006)
- thank you very much! I'm working on writing longer, more elaborate chapters, but I get easily distracted, :-)
The next chapter will definitely be a lot more involved, with a lot more detail. Enjoy!
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| Reviewer:
ramses
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Sep 12, 2006 |
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Very good and promising start. Very well written. Hope to see more soon. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
hurt me
(Edit) (Sep 12, 2006)
- thank you!
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| Reviewer:
H Dean
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Sep 9, 2006 |
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Stylistically and technically solid are the worst comments I can make about this tale. If it continues, as I hope it will, I imagine this could be quite the popular story. Write on. (8/10)
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- Replied by:
hurt me
(Edit) (Sep 10, 2006)
- wow, thank you very much! I work hard on keeping my work consistently easy to read and follow, thanks for noticing!
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H Dean
(Edit) (Sep 10, 2006)
- I just finished the second part of this little tale. I cannot say that the quality has lessened but I can say that it has grown more interesting. If it continues in this fashion, I am certain many reviews (mine included) will see a raised review number.
- Replied by:
hurt me
(Edit) (Sep 12, 2006)
- wonderful! I'm glad you're enjoying it so far! Keep reading, it only gets better from here!
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| Reviewer:
scabrat
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Sep 7, 2006 |
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Really nice intro and easy to read (8/10)
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- Replied by:
hurt me
(Edit) (Sep 10, 2006)
- Thank you! That's a wonderful compliment, as easy to read was my goal.
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| Reviewer:
slutsteph
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Sep 4, 2006 |
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girl loves the beginning. It makes girl feel like she is on Gor, that great series by John Norman. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
hurt me
(Edit) (Sep 6, 2006)
- wow, thanks! What a great complement!
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| Reviewer:
mike uk reader
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Sep 4, 2006 |
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The deliverance start to this story is nothing more than excellent both in plot lead up and is very well written, this author whether female or male has the talent in weaving an erotic story at it's outstanding best infact I put you on par without any doubt with the queen of this kind of fiction " Susan Karlson " (who's stories can be found on this site) I would love her to give you her opinions here if she log's in to the site.
Looking out for more from you soon and keeping the standed up. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
hurt me
(Edit) (Sep 6, 2006)
- whoa! What a fabulous complement - thank you so very much!
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| Reviewer:
heycarrieanne
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Sep 4, 2006 |
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A good start, but I will reserve a higher rating until I read more. It would be nice to know why they picked her. (7/10)
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- Replied by:
hurt me
(Edit) (Sep 6, 2006)
- lol, I can accept that! This is only the beginning, you'll learn more as you read!
- Replied by:
heycarrieanne
(Edit) (Sep 13, 2006)
- The second chapter was very good. As soon as the "edit" is fixed here, I will be raising your score.
- Replied by:
heycarrieanne
(Edit) (Sep 29, 2006)
- I feel a little sick to my stomach after reading the third part!
- Replied by:
hurt me
(Edit) (Oct 2, 2006)
- oh dear, I didn't mean to make you sick! The idea was to show the violence that can accompany this kind of lifestyle. Plus, I've had a fascination with animal maulings ever since I saw "The Ghost and The Darkness."
Anyways, the next few chapters won't be so violent, I promise!
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Sep 4, 2006 |
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very nice start hope there is more on the way (9/10)
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- Replied by:
hurt me
(Edit) (Sep 6, 2006)
- of course there is! It shouldn't be too long at all!
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