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Average (?):  (4/10) |
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| Reviewer:
ElectricBadger
(Edit) |
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May 20, 2007 |
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A good first effort, but I suggest you focus your work on learning the technical details of writing in a peer review environment rather than simply posting. Check out the forums, lots of people there happy to help you.
(4/10)
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| Reviewer:
arabella
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May 19, 2007 |
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Sorry Steve but this is just a poorly written and boring story. The ratio of ego to quality is too high. Hot? Maybe luke warm. Try again with a bit more modesty. (2/10)
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| Reviewer:
25toLife
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May 17, 2007 |
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Do you speak English? at all? (2/10)
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| Reviewer:
chksng19
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May 14, 2007 |
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And so very many more concerns. This appears to be a story written off the cuff, without any planning or care given to interesting the reader. It's one an experienced reader will give up on quickly, and not bother with again. It should not be "rated R", as those stories don't have explicit sex.
Perhaps you might have others read and critique the work before you post them. This story appears to be the work of a very inexperienced writer; much work is needed to develop your skill (3/10)
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| Reviewer:
Curtis
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May 14, 2007 |
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I agree with slvWriting, but let's add a couple more. This is an F/m story, not the M/f that the story codes claim, and the first time Mrs. Pearson is mentioned, it's as Mr. Pearson, which confused me for awhile. (3/10)
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| Reviewer:
slvWriting
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May 13, 2007 |
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Another story that was simply a mini-short story. But that's not why I give it a low-rating, because a story can be extra short and still be good, it's just that it's hard to believe such a short story can contradict itself so many times and have so many errors:
"Why is he called the Titanic, well his penis is longer than all the boys in the 12th grade"... but "Alex is already 18, so he does not need his parents permission". He is 18 and goes to the 12th grade?
"He moans as his penis is getting pleasured by the tight penis and Mrs. Pearson is getting pleasured by the rock hard penis." And there are even more. I suggest you proof-read your stories before posting them. (4/10)
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mkemse
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May 13, 2007 |
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was a good read buti had a hard time with the goig back and forth he said she said type dialog, i assume it was done like that on purpose, just not my style of writingbut still a good story (7/10)
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