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The punishment fit the crime
Author: BJojomogo
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(Added on Sep 4, 2008)
(This month 66816 readers) (Total 103205 readers) |
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Two female high fliers get greedy, and are blackmailed to humiliation, paying the price for greed |
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Average (?):  (8/10) |
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| Reviewer:
JimmyJump
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Jan 20, 2009 |
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Sometimes BJojomogo's entries remind me of a couple of lines from a Rainbow song (The Shed - Long Live Rock 'n' Roll, 1978 Polydor): "I'm like a freight train, feeling no pain, I never step back one track, better step aside..."
Cuz the story's pace at times takes on that of a runaway freight train, crusing all subbtlety and do-goody-goodness along the way.
Still, "Punishment" is well written, just lacking a tad in depth.
JJ (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
Chuckdom19
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Sep 12, 2008 |
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A fine story, with but a few faults; Emma becomes Valerie, on and off, though the middle of the tale. The end is rather rushed, I thought... more description of the pony training and such could have been provided. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
BJojomogo
(Edit) (Sep 12, 2008)
- Sorry about the name confusion. It was written as Valerie, then changed to Emma in tribute to a lovely lady. I thought I had been so careful, but not careful enough. The trouble with stories is that they have to end somewhere. I have difficulty stemming the flow, but I never want the stories to be too long.
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| Reviewer:
jkim
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Sep 7, 2008 |
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gyrl thought your story had great potential, and had many hot moments. she thinks it moved a bit fast, so it was hard to feel the depth of humiliation. More dialogue would have been a nice addition. gyrl looks forward to more! (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Sep 6, 2008 |
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loved it, everything i like in a good story, theme, well written proofed ect good job (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
MasterG-
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Sep 5, 2008 |
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I found your story to be well written and I was able to follow the plot without a problem. I love stories about blackmail and your story didn't fall short. I appreciate the time and effort that you took to write this story for the rest of us. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
BJojomogo
(Edit) (Sep 5, 2008)
- Thank you for your comment. Writing it was all fun and little effort. I was just disappointed that after all the care I took with formatting, somehow in the download it all went awry, I felt it distracted from my story when lines were split in two etc. But I enjoyed meeting the ladies.
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