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Talkative Schoolgirls Amber & Allison Are Paddled
Author: Carolina Spanker
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(Added on Sep 30, 2012)
(This month 11425 readers) (Total 20798 readers) |
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Here we have two senior girl who have reached the age of majority, but still live under house rules. So, when Amber and Allison talk in class the paddle comes out after years collecting dust. |
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Average (?):  (6.5/10) |
Average
Rating:  (7/10) |
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| Reviewer:
PantyLine
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Jul 18, 2014 |
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I liked that the girls were paddle to marks and then got another spanking when they lest could take it. (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
CarolinaSpanker
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Oct 10, 2012 |
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Listen everyone has their own opinion, but this story is a schoolgirl fantasy come true. There is a meeting with a teacher where the uncle finds out his girls are not acting like ladies, ie, panty thong and up skirt, panty crotch. Not to mention their cutting up and not doing their homework. He paddles them they react by farting and the author describes the color and condition of their butts. They even get a reminder spanking to help them behave in class before school. In my opinion as long as I can read and understand it and there is a flow to the story it's a winner I recommend to others who like schoolgirl stories. (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
Michael247
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Oct 10, 2012 |
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I'm brain dead now.
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It's rare for me to rate a story so low, but I'm afraid I can't help it with "Talkative Schoolgirls Amber & Allison Are Paddled", the title of which is almost example enough of the grammar and sentence composition found within. Usually I try to examine stories I read with two aspects in mind - the author's technical capacity and the story's plot construction.
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I think when it comes to technical capacity, the following direct quote from the story itself serves us nicely. "Your nieces silly notice me dressing, talking out of turn and failure to do homework assignments is unacceptable regardless of their ability to perform at a high academic level in my history class." After reading this sentence and only having a bare concept that the uncle of Amber & Allison was having a parent/teacher conference with one of the girl's instructors, I sat pondering a few things. The first of course was "what the hell is the author TRYING to say here?" The next was "why did the author not actually say it?" And lastly, "Do I really care at this point." Since I was tired, I skipped the first two questions and went straight to the third, answering it with a resounding "No." The story craftsmanship is choppy, barely readable, awkward and difficult to comprehend. I almost want to say that the author doesn't speak or write very good English.
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From a plot perspective, not much happens. Over two thirds of the story is setup, which in and of itself drives me banana crackers, especially since most of it involving setting up some ludicrous situation where two middle school girls have their parents die (really?) only to be raised by their "old school" uncle, who only slowly realized that his nieces are not only cock teases but disobedient little bitches as well. And how does he handle it? Spanking. And not even really good spankings either. There is no tension build up, the characters aren't even two dimensional, much less grow, and the nameless uncle is nothing more than a motorized wooden paddle robot.
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If the author doesn't speak or write English, then I'd like to encourage them to keep trying. This wasn't a BAD tale, it just wasn't good, and the basic concept wasn't terrible either. Any author of quality can take a tired, worn out, plot line and make it sing. You just have to try. Remember to make a plot arc, create development, and write, write, write.
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Yours Faithfully, Michael Alexander
(www.michaelalexanderstories.com) (3/10)
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