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Victoria the Toy Girl
Author: Lokker12
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(Added on Aug 9, 2015)
(This month 166487 readers) (Total 166487 readers) |
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Young Victoria awakes in a strange place, reminiscent of a hospital. Soon she endures intense body modifications, and is forced into a torturous body suit which will act as her prison. She is methodically turned into a human sex toy, intended for the pleasure of her owner. |
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Average (?):  (6/10) |
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| Reviewer:
Transformateur
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Feb 20, 2016 |
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I like this story. Waiting for a following (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
death2uall
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Sep 26, 2015 |
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The biggest problem with this story, outside of some annoying-but-ignorable grammar mistakes, is that it never becomes a story. Rather, it's a catalog of horrors.
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The essence of drama is struggle. The problem here is that the viewpoint character/heroine/victim, Victoria, never gets a CHANCE to struggle. By the time the story begins, she's already been captured, rendered COMPLETELY helpless, and operated upon. She never even gets the chance to resist emotionally, because there's no time for her to adjust to her horrifying circumstances, and the author seems unable to describe any emotion besides unthinking horror.
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I'd have given this a lower score were it not for the fact that some of the descriptive text is, in fact, very hot. I'd have given it a HIGHER score if it weren't for the very annoying grammatical and punctuational errors. If you like descriptions of horrible shit being done to people without provocation or backstory, without even knowing anything about the only actual CHARACTER in the story outside of her physical description (petite with big tits, whoopee ...), then this yarn might be for you. (4/10)
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- Replied by:
Transformateur
(Edit) (Feb 20, 2016)
- Of course is the story not believable, but the description of the transformation is very good and the auteur has a great imagination. I like the story and want to have a following.
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