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Stranded
Author: Mellanie Hewlitt
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(Added on Sep 20, 2002)
(This month 9878 readers) (Total 24093 readers) |
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The supermodel was the only survivor from the plane crash in this Amazon rain forest. While she was waiting for the rescue team, she was found first by the local people, who came to investigate their latest "offering from the gods". |
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Average (?):  (6/10) |
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Feb 18, 2007 |
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It was very much worth the time to read (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
Equalizer
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Sep 22, 2002 |
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An engaging tale. Enjoyed the portrayal of Denise and her plight. This interesting scenario could have been developed further.
(7/10)
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- Replied by:
hyphen666
(Edit) (Sep 22, 2002)
- You are entitled to your opinion of the story, and I expect you to respect mine.
- Replied by:
Equalizer
(Edit) (Sep 23, 2002)
- Hyphen, your continued lack of respect to the writers on this site does not earn you any respect.
- Replied by:
mellaniehewlitt
(Edit) (Sep 23, 2002)
- Dear Equalizer
Thanks for the comments,.
I will try to do a better job next time, but it does get increasingly difficult. I only just started writing as a hobby and already suffer writers block occasionally.
Love
Mellanie
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| Reviewer:
hyphen666
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Sep 22, 2002 |
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This story is over burdened with details, most of them completely incorrect or totally inappropriate, an abundance of humorous typos and grammatical errors too numerous to tally. Once that happened it was all over. Now all I could look forward to was another superb blunder worthy of a good laugh, and I was seldom disappointed. By the way the story is also trite in the extreme and the ending worthy of a children's book. In the future write about things and places that you really know. Please realize that your readers, who are investing their valuable time, are looking to be stimulated, not irritated by poor workmanship, or is workwomanship. If I wanted humor, I would not be reading the type of story you purported to be writing. As is my wont, this rating has nothing to do with the review by the numbers scheme now in vogue at this site. (3/10)
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- Replied by:
mellaniehewlitt
(Edit) (Sep 23, 2002)
- Dear hyphen666
My oh my what brave words. I can also see that whilst your less than engaging tone is a continuing source of amusement to me, it has distanced other reviewers on this site.<br>This is all the more laughable since the so called "judge" is now "judged" by others.<br>I would love to read some of your original works and learn from you oh great lord and master. But being female I have also noted that the males that trumphet the most also quite frequently have the smallest sexual member. Going by your words, yours would be almost non-existent.<br>But thank you again for your critique, and I look forward eagerly to more of the same from you, you are a never ending source of amusement.<br>Take care & lots of love<br>Mellanie
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| Reviewer:
LaJan
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Sep 22, 2002 |
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I felt a little better about this story than mickydoughty did and rate it a bit higher. I'm not at all sure what more was expected; the rape passages were extremely complete and detailed in my opinion. And the very well-detailed setting painted a picture I could easily see mentally.
There were, however, numerous spelling, sentence structure and grammatical errors which detracted from the content of the story, all of which could have been corrected by using Word (or even simple email spell check at Yahoo, where the author alråady has a mail box).
Overall, I can recommend this story and, compared to a lot I have read, this effort stands well above a plenty of them. I will bookmark this author as "one to watch" for future reading. Peace. LaJan (7/10)
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- Replied by:
mellaniehewlitt
(Edit) (Sep 23, 2002)
- Dear Lajan, thanks for taking the time to comment. The story is actually the combined work fo 2 people, myself and my husband.
I usually start with the scenerio, and he carries on with his sexual fantasies. I will be more careful with grammar and spelligs in future.
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| Reviewer:
mickydoughty
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Sep 20, 2002 |
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Well story content was good, could have explored much more of a sexual content. The story opens up with a great decription of how and why, but then becomes disappointing as the start lays the ground for a much long and interseting plot.
I found the story enjoyable and well worth reading, but was expecting more. if this author was likely to expand and explore further ideas in this story, it would be worthwhile as its turned into a novellete. (6/10)
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- Replied by:
mellaniehewlitt
(Edit) (Sep 20, 2002)
- Thanks for the comments, do you mean the sexual content was insufficient????
- Replied by:
mellaniehewlitt
(Edit) (Sep 23, 2002)
- Thanks for the honest comments. I will try to touch-up on giving the story more body and substance.
- Replied by:
mickydoughty
(Edit) (Sep 29, 2002)
- Hewlitt, what i could have done with is more description of the sex and violence. You take great pains to describe how our supermodel gets to the amazon and her survival up to being "rescued" by the local people.
The sexual and violent content is a rather small part of the story, and could have been the bulk of it.
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