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Kidnaping and Training
Author: Lorraine
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(Added on Dec 24, 2002)
(This month 65256 readers) (Total 94318 readers) |
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This is a story about kidnapping and training slaves, and all the joys involved. |
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Average (?):  (1.5/10) |
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Rating: (1.5/10) |
Highest
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| Reviewer:
tbear4759
(Edit) |
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Mar 25, 2007 |
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giving this piece of garbage a 1 is being generous. (1/10)
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Feb 7, 2007 |
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the longest single paragraph i have ever read, this rating of 1 in more then generous because you can't rate lower
i have been reading and reviewing stories for some time, this is unquestionably the worst single story i have seen anywhere
good thing you did not post on a pay site or members would demand their money back
watching paint dry or waiting for water to boil offers more entertainment then this
aside from all this it is a great story (1/10)
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| Reviewer:
littleslut
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Jun 17, 2004 |
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so bad it makes me laugh. (1/10)
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| Reviewer:
gojack10
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Apr 9, 2004 |
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What? I'm giving this story its highest rating! And I always am rating other stories 2-3 less than others normally do. But this is really kind of inspired I think...
Others write about 'moans', but this writer knows all about 'puming her hard'! huuuuuuuuu!
<<I lick her nipple she moans I begin puming her hard she's
happy, then I hear her uuuuuuuuuuhhhhhhhhhhhhhh aaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhhhhhh
aaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhhhhhhhhh mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm hhhhhhhhhhhhhhuuuuuuuuuuu!
uuu hhhhhhhhhhhuuuuuuuuuuuuuu she came, I still am pumping hard
ooooooooooooohhhhhhhhhhhhhhh yesssssssssssssssss I came, I kiss my sweet pet and...>> (3/10)
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| Reviewer:
Engineer
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May 11, 2003 |
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One of the worst I ever read. Catastrophic language - just an unstructured string of characters. Content? As awkward as the language. I cannot distill any sense out of this. (1/10)
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ladys_maid
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May 6, 2003 |
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Sorry , but this story is terrible. (1/10)
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babyd
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Feb 10, 2003 |
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Review it? I cannot even read it! (1/10)
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| Reviewer:
CoffinNail
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Dec 29, 2002 |
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"Unreadable dribble. (1/10)"
Not to mention drivel ;)
--CN
(1/10)
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abitbent
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Dec 29, 2002 |
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Unreadable dribble. (1/10)
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| Reviewer:
Nitrofox
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Dec 27, 2002 |
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Umm ... haha ... that's all I can say for this pile of ... bad writing. It looks like it's been translated from Swahili into English into Bangaldeshi into English, and then messed up some more. One word: wow. " ... with writing skills bordering on illiteracy" is hardly accurate. Simply illiterate is more like it. When the author cannot write his title without making a spelling error, you know you're in trouble. (1/10)
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- Replied by:
Nitrofox
(Edit) (May 31, 2003)
- I took the time to look at this again. It's actually rather amusing. I'm considering showing it to my friends just for a laugh. It probably takes some people a while to actually realize this is a pornography story.
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peachmellon
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Dec 27, 2002 |
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wow.. ummm... did you think maybe you should have used spell check.. i usually give high reviews.. this one needs a lot of help... LOTSSS>>>> (1/10)
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tink
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Dec 26, 2002 |
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Numerous spelling errors and grammatical errors make this story almost impossible to read. What really pushed it over the edge for me, though, was the fact that it's just one big ol' block of text -- the author never seems to hit return and therefore give the reader any whitespace in which to rest his/her eyes. (1/10)
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isolomon
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Dec 25, 2002 |
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I can't tell anything about the content, because the language is so bad. This is beyond the need for editing. I've edited some professional erotic stories. Editing implies a few slips here and there, spell checking, and fixing some dicey grammar. It does not imply translating giberish into English. (1/10)
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| Reviewer:
ErikavonKZ
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Dec 24, 2002 |
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Needs serious editing. (2/10)
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- Replied by:
Nitrofox
(Edit) (Jan 9, 2003)
- More like rewriting. How could this be given a 2/10?
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| Reviewer:
Powerone
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Dec 24, 2002 |
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Another three chapter story with only one paragraph. And that is the best part of it. I hope the author used a language translation program to translate this from a foreign language because that is the only excuse I could see for such a lump of bad grammar, incomplete sentences, misspelled words and a general lack of knowledge of the English language (1/10)
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