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A New Life
Author: woodsman's game
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(Added on Aug 24, 2003)
(This month 89918 readers) (Total 116549 readers) |
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They have been together for a long time, but things are going to change. He has plans for her. (A little fantasy, a little reality) |
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Average (?):  (8/10) |
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| Reviewer:
pejanon
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Jun 21, 2005 |
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Quite rare story involving mature couple (absolutely no pun intended).Really caring. Two narrators compliment each other creating a sense of dialogue. Second person narraton adds to a feeling of intimacy - its not just a gimmick. Carefuly plotted - two twist (Ch 2 and at the end) are very good.
OK, it might be considered somewhat tame, but prooves that hi-tech dungeons, handlers, 1000+ slaves etc really are not necessary. (8/10)
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- Replied by:
woodsman'sgame
(Edit) (Jun 23, 2005)
- Thank you for your comments. They are much appreciated.
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| Reviewer:
WackySpurtz
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Apr 3, 2005 |
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Not the best writing. (5/10)
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- Replied by:
woodsman'sgame
(Edit) (Jun 23, 2005)
- I'm sorry you didn't like it. Maybe some of my others you will find better. This was my first after all.
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| Reviewer:
warywench
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Nov 12, 2004 |
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Wow! Great story! I could really feel the emotion of both characters. I can't wait to read more of your stories. Thank you! (10/10)
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woodsman'sgame
(Edit) (Jun 23, 2005)
- Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
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| Reviewer:
Mastersbeauty
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Oct 30, 2004 |
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I really liked this story!! This is the first of your stories I have read. I really believed the script. It felt so real. The details were what really brought the story together!! Bravo!! I would love to read more in this line, husband and wife 24/7. (10/10)
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- Replied by:
woodsman'sgame
(Edit) (Jun 23, 2005)
- Thank you for your comments. Most of mine are about husband and wife so read on.
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| Reviewer:
crickette
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Oct 2, 2003 |
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I thoroughly enjoyed reading your story. It was very well written and easy to follow. I could feel the passion and love you conveyed between Aaron and Constanza as well as the intensity. I looked forward to reading other pieces you have written. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
woodsman'sgame
(Edit) (Jun 29, 2004)
- Thank you all for your reviews. I had not responded immediately because I could not. Jinn finally corrected my proble and I am responding now, even though it is several months later. This was my first story so I obviously had room for improvement. Let's see what the future brings.
- Replied by:
woodsman'sgame
(Edit) (Jun 23, 2005)
- Thank you for your comments. A review is always appreciated.
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woodsman'sgame
(Edit) (Jun 23, 2005)
- Thank you for your comments. I'm sorry it has taken me a while to respond, but I have not checked this story for quite some time.
- Replied by:
woodsman'sgame
(Edit) (Jun 23, 2005)
- Thank you for your comments. I'm sorry it has taken me a while to respond, but I have not checked this story for quite some time.
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Oct 1, 2003 |
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Nicely Done (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
Fox
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Sep 29, 2003 |
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I had the privelege of proofreading this work. I found it to be charged with raw emotion in its first draft; the author has made it even more so in the final draft. Excellent writing. (9/10)
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redEva
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Aug 28, 2003 |
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Very nice, i did not find it the least bit confusing. Amazingly full of emotions. (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
Lord Douche
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Aug 25, 2003 |
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I, on the other hand, think the change is a good idea. As long as you can continue the seperate styles it could work well.
The start was fine. It wasn't too hard to work out who was the focus. Ambiguity however, can be a good thing and a bad thing, breeding mystery or confusion.
I quite liked this story. Keep up the good work.
PS: You stole my story name! (New Life) *grin* (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
le forgeron
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Aug 25, 2003 |
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The start of the first chapter is too ambiguous about the setting, and who is reporting.
The swap of point of view with the second chapter is not a good idea, it distracts more than needed: the scope is very different from the first chapter. At best, the second might be the first, then sticking to the wife-mode (immediate feeling, no long plan). (6/10)
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