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Sara's Punishment
Author: dog breath
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(Added on Sep 13, 2003)
(This month 53641 readers) (Total 76550 readers) |
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A slutty wife gets more than she bargains for after a night on the town. |
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Average (?):  (2.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Feb 23, 2007 |
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you missed everything badly, spelling, grammar and to many other things to mention, the synopsis for the story was better then the story itself (2/10)
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OneHotThing4All
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Sep 28, 2003 |
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Badly done! With improved grammer and a little subtlety the subject can be ok! See 'Fried Green Tomatoes' or 'Hamburg Snuff Party!' (1/10)
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Emily
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Sep 24, 2003 |
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The storyline is quite terror-filled indeed, unfortunately the grammar needs a lot of work. (4/10)
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brant223
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Sep 21, 2003 |
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Awful. (2/10)
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| Reviewer:
bdsmbill
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Sep 17, 2003 |
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Not worth the time. Maybe with some work it could be a bit better. (2/10)
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boccaccio2000g
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Sep 15, 2003 |
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Sorry, but those first two interminable sentences were enough for me (1/10)
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e.e. norcod
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Sep 15, 2003 |
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lex and Lady Lance are right. Before you can write you have to master the basics. Back and at it again. I must admit that snuff is not my bag (cp is) but none-the-less the plot is a little bit better than the average snuff. Needs a lot of work but keep trying. (3/10)
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lex ludite
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Sep 15, 2003 |
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Another Dolcett fan heard from; evidently one who has studied writing at the Pagan stream of consciousness school. Since I stayed with this mess until the end I feel honor bound to review it. It has some pace, the plot wasn't all that bad, but the lack of punctuation and the unbelievable ending are just too much to let go unchallenged. (3/10)
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Lady Lance
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Sep 15, 2003 |
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Two of the most important things in any story are spelling and grammar. No matter how good a story is, if a reader has to decipher what you wrote they are not going to enjoy your story.
I cannot say whether or not the story was any good simply because it required too much effort to read. Clean it up, and maybe I'll try again. (2/10)
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