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Taliban
Author: Alebeard
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(Added on Dec 30, 2003)
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A pleasant story of kindness, love and hope, mixed along with rape, torture and abuse. |
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Average (?):  (7.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
Gordi
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Apr 30, 2008 |
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It's all good. The torture ideas, the descriptions, the writing style. Good.
I know it's pointless to comment on this 5 fucking years after it was posted, but...
I think you had something going with that whole personal slave girl thing, you know, the 15 year old. You could have used it more as a central narrative in the second part, and I think that would have given you some more of a story to work with. That probably would have enabled you to continue writing this excellent story.
Oh, and fuck all you grammar nuts. It's a story about scalding a woman's pussy and you're checking for type-o's. Get a life. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
Alebeard
(Edit) (Apr 30, 2008)
- Thank you, Maybe I should pick the story back up
Ale
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| Reviewer:
Venom
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Jul 13, 2007 |
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An enjoyable writing with sufficient background story. The gradations of tortures and rapes are realistic and especially the scalding is a nice idea. (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
Aniga
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Jan 18, 2004 |
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A story by the great Alebeard after a long time! The caning of Fatima's asshole and lower pussy, and the scene where she has to run the gauntlet of the ten soldiers are particularly arousing. The alternation of the story with that of Fabian reminds me of "Two for torment" (Paula). One looks forward to futher descriptions of Fabi's torture, perhaps the contemplated nipple burning, and of course many more girlsin need of punishment. (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
Faibhar
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Jan 4, 2004 |
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Others have pointed out revisionist historical points and a casual approach to English grammar - all too true in this piece. While much of the material here and elsewhere is necessarily derivative, (the writer even mentions other works used for inspiration in his preface) a certain "freshness" combined with rational acceptability is not too much to ask. Sadly, more is asked of readers than is answered.
(6/10)
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| Reviewer:
insex
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Jan 2, 2004 |
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9of10 (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
lex ludite
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Jan 1, 2004 |
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I know I'm a bit late with my two cents, but I can't let the opportunity pass without a few comments. What this site needs is more material in this vein, good old fashioned sex and violence, the mainstream. Trying to make this material sound fresh is another challenge all together, but that's a problem with all but the tiniest fraction of the work posted here. It also would help the author's cause if the editing could be tightened up. Some of the sentences and paragraphs would make an english teacher cringe. However,on balance the amount of heat and the subject matter easily overcome the mechanical imperfections of this effort. I look forward to further installments of this nasty, mindless tale. (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
emmalee
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Dec 31, 2003 |
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I have a fondness for rape and torture stories, and this ranks right up there. (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
bdsmbill
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Dec 31, 2003 |
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The problems with knowledge of the area already mentioned were distracting. Not bad otherwise. (6/10)
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annasherwood
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Dec 30, 2003 |
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good setting, nice narrative, and i liked the little bits of humour...seemed to go on a little long, though, and (i confess this is a pet peeve of mine) the mis-spelling of "your" for "you're" distracted me...overall, a worthwhile story that, to be perfect, could be tightened up a bit... (6/10)
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Jones, Nikka
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Dec 30, 2003 |
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Nice story. (I am waiting for more) Original point of view/narration. Good fantasy material. Written in very descriptic fashion. Some research could have helped. For example the native languages of the people of Afganistan are Patush, Dari, and Tadjik, yet the characters in the story speak Arabic and have Arabic names. The war in Afganistan was against the soviets, not the russians, etc. (7/10)
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