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The Sheik's Prize
Author: Julie
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(Added on Sep 25, 2004)
(This month 52635 readers) (Total 70553 readers) |
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Southern California girl abducted by a Arabian Sheik and trained as his sex slave. |
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Average (?):  (5.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
spicym
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Nov 10, 2004 |
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add more chapters (8/10)
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castle2001
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Sep 28, 2004 |
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All of the above. Didn't someone say that there were
only a few plots from which all writing is derived.
A western female captured and trained in a foreign land is always arousing if done well. (5/10)
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| Reviewer:
diem
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Sep 27, 2004 |
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A well used plot, but great potential for following chapters. Don't hold back. (5/10)
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chksng19
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Sep 27, 2004 |
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Yes the plot is old and overused. But, yes, I love to see it being told another way. You have some good basic skills; see what you can do with paragraph length and completion of expressed ideas.
None of us like critics. But having this benefit here, perhaps with the help of a proofreader, might build those scores. I think you show promise: why not give it another try?
I hope you plan to add to the story; I'd like to see more. (5/10)
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Sep 26, 2004 |
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to much like other stories, american girl gets kidnapped, turned into a slve for a shiek, the idea is way over used, but i give you credit for trying (5/10)
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| Reviewer:
rob.wilson
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Sep 26, 2004 |
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Take this critism in the way it's meant. Positive.
Show us, don't tell us. Don't be afraid to include descriptions as part of the dialog. You show a bit of talent, keep working on it. A few more rewrites and this could have earned an 8 from me.
Rob (5/10)
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