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Charity Work
Author: John Slogan
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(Added on Jan 11, 2005)
(This month 56987 readers) (Total 72073 readers) |
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Passed out in the mens toilet wasn't where she thought she wanted to be. But since her parents died and she dropped out of college. She was desperate. Lucky for her a passing slut trainer takes pity and decides to train her. Will she survive the charity. |
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Average (?):  (5.5/10) |
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Highest
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Mar 23, 2006 |
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needs work, needs spell checking (6/10)
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| Reviewer:
Cokera
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Jan 20, 2005 |
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I think this one took a great deal of thought but the effort was simply left out. My opinion is that you may want to use it as a outline and continue with the storyline. It shows a great deal of imagination and a good sense of where you want to go but is in reality a unfinished work. Give us more !!! (5/10)
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MasterRodsPet
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Jan 16, 2005 |
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I did enjoy the story, however, the spelling and grammar errors were a little distracting. I do hope that you will continue on with the story, it has great potential. If you would like someone to read it over and check for spelling errors, I would be happy to do so. (5/10)
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| Reviewer:
LordVetinari
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Jan 15, 2005 |
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An intriguing idea, but the many spelling and grammar errors kept me from enjoying it as I had hoped to. (4/10)
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Master_chris
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Jan 13, 2005 |
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great beging to the story, I can't wait to see that happens to her, and to see the results of the slut tranings, will she be sold or be used int he training house (6/10)
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| Reviewer:
crickette
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Jan 12, 2005 |
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Not a bad storyline but it could use a little work. This are alot of mistakes in grammar and the story felt rushed. Your initial setup suggested something that would last longer and be in longer, clearer detail. There is though, definately something there to work with. (5/10)
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