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Laura Croft and the Venus Thigh Trap
Author: SensoryOverlord
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(Added on May 4, 2005)
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Laura Croft raids the ancient Temple of Phali, for a fabled artefact - the Golden Lingam. She encounters more than she expected. |
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Average (?):  (9.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
JimmyJump
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Jan 26, 2009 |
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Like I have said before, I'm usually not into spoofs, because, to be honest, they more often than not are used by sorry arses to reflect their (those sorry arses) shortcomings on the level of coming-up with their own invented characters and to be able to vent all the drooling fantasies that some sorry arse couch potatoes let dribble from their peanut brains.
However, SensoryOverlord is an exception, in that he doesn't as much spoof the whole idea of the original, but rather wrote an XXX version of it, albeit a nasty one with lots of stuff you wouldn't be wanted caught dreaming of.
Also, since the original is in fact already a spoof of a combination of known figures (Indiana Jone, James Bond, Mata Hari) it is rather hard to spoof.
Anyway, SensoryOverlord has done a great job, by, in fact, re-inventing the franchise, by writing a better screenplay than the ones that came before.
The story is great, the settings are wonderful, the dialogue is deliciously tongue-in-cheek and the characters are all nicely chiseled, with sharp edges and recognizable features.
Did I say excellent? No?
Well, here it is: Excellent!
There you go.
JJ (10/10)
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suprvulcan
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Jun 28, 2008 |
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Love this story everytime I read it. I am still hoping for the rest of the story. I can see the story going a couple of different ways from this point. I am eager to see what direction you go. Excellent story, I am eagerly awaiting more. (10/10)
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25toLife
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Jun 5, 2007 |
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This might be one of the best stories to be posted on this site, or the internet even. Can't wait to see more.
However, I do have a small request: Could you possibly, just slightly, causually mention how good-looking Vance and his croonies are? It just eats me up when I read about a beauty being spoiled by a bunch of ugly guys... (and yes, I do realize it adds to the humiliation but it just eats me up) (10/10)
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SensoryOverlord
(Edit) (Jun 9, 2007)
- Hmm. I wrote a reply to this the other day but it seems to have gone AWOL. Anyway ... (I HATE rewriting lost thoughts...) thanks! Now, why do you assume they are ugly? My not describing their looks definitively yet is deliberate. Just remember that the story is from Laura's viewpoint, and some of her thoughts/perceptions are not truly her own. You should have picked that up by now. Oh and btw, his looks are not the only thing you are misguessing about Vance.
There are some little tricks yet to appear in this story, and many of the puzzle pieces you'll need are still missing. Be patient (particularly with my awfully slow writing - sorry about that. Next chapter is more than half done.
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25toLife
(Edit) (Jun 16, 2007)
- It seems like the stories that I really like always end up unfinished, I pray it will not be the case with this one. There's this story named 'Buffy's Bitch' and I'm still waiting for the next chapter after about 3 or 4 years but I have lost most of my patience by now. And I do realize it's completely irrelevant.
P.S.: I didn't really misguess about Vance's looks since the ethnicity of his cronies are often thoguht of as exotic. I'm just asking to make sure, since this story really speaks to me.
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rilawild
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Aug 26, 2006 |
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A very well written story with good pacing and exciting story line. I wasn't convinced at first by the addition of a 'medical' D/s sub-plot to the story - seemed too much of a departure; but actually it works well. I do hope that the story continues. (10/10)
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Jemmasub
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Feb 21, 2006 |
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It is such a shame Master Ra marked it with a 5, your work is exceptional, the story line erotic and most certainly arousing. The 2nd and 3rd chapters are as exciting as the first which is a real challange. It took me ages to read it all for . . .well reasons which I wont go into here, but the whole thing left me exhausted and highly aroused. Thank you Sir SensoryOverlord, you have caused a Sensory Overload. Please keep writing more mor more, you have no idea what you do to me.
Jemma. . . . (10/10)
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fourwalleddemon
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Feb 17, 2006 |
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Loved the story,contained great atmosphere and captured her helplessness in a wonderfully erotic way (especially the impalement on the cone).Makes me wonder where you take Laura to next?... (9/10)
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SensoryOverlord
(Edit) (Feb 17, 2006)
- Next? It shouldn't spoil the surprise, to say that in the next episode Laura has a Great Escape scene. Only, the results will not be quite what she expected.
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chksng19
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Feb 10, 2006 |
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A hilarious parody on the movies and games. Wonderful detail and interesting flash to the past sequence. Keep it going, please! (10/10)
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Kira
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Jun 20, 2005 |
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Very nice story and ideas, will we see a new story or chapter in future? I hope so. There are more artefacts around that Laura can explor. (10/10)
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Matrixx
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May 24, 2005 |
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Great story and well written.
`Can't wait fro the rest!
Keep up the good work! (10/10)
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Master Ra
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May 13, 2005 |
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You definitely have some creative genius but your grammer borders on illiteracy. Please have someone edit your writing before submission. I enjoyed the images you conjured and it gave me ideas as to what I will do to my sub. Thank you (5/10)
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- Replied by:
SensoryOverlord
(Edit) (May 13, 2005)
- Ha ha ha! Thats GRAMMAR to you, perfectionist.
Oh, and look, its the _very_first_ review you've ever posted. I hope you can maintain such high standards of sarcasm in future.
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25toLife
(Edit) (Jun 5, 2007)
- pwned...
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jbowler65
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May 8, 2005 |
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Excellent work. You were able to bring the story to life with vivid details. We have high hopes for future chapters. (10/10)
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DJ Tuk
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May 6, 2005 |
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Excellent - if there is more - bring it on! (10/10)
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the prussian
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May 5, 2005 |
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Your writing painted mental images in my mind that I could envision the entire scene, constantly awaiting the vines that were slowly advancing. I am not sure how you will continue, however if this first part is any indication it should be quite interesting. 10/10 (10/10)
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- Replied by:
SensoryOverlord
(Edit) (May 12, 2005)
- How will it continue? Well, if it was real life, she'd hang there till she dies, then rot and her bones would fall into the pool, like all those others. But of course, its not real life, its the _movies_. And we all know what happens in the movies when the heroine is in a jam.
With the slight difference that this is an X-rated movie, so maybe she'd rather have died and rotted.
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