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Spanish Donkey
Author: Woolfighter
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(Added on Jun 25, 2005)
(This month 137761 readers) (Total 236096 readers) |
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Teaching a female teacher her place. |
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Average (?):  (8/10) |
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| Reviewer:
jep33
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Oct 24, 2007 |
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I have just "discovered" this author's works and I find them quite enjoyable. They are outlandish and that makes them all the more erotic. Yes, the English is faulty but if I were writing in the author's native tongue, my stories would be sorely lacking. I commend the author for quite good - and quite enjoyable - writing. (8/10)
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street0
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Sep 20, 2007 |
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I love a bit of torture to go with my humiliation. This story's a delight, though I'd prefer male characters over the age of majority. (8/10)
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owenowned1
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Nov 18, 2006 |
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love it love it. Such a lovely balance between what the poor ones being tortured are feeling and the glee of their users. (10/10)
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- Replied by:
woolfighter
(Edit) (Nov 19, 2006)
- That's the kind of review any author loves. Thx for enjoying so much my story, you are the reason I wrote it.
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| Reviewer:
Maestropretoriano
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Jul 12, 2006 |
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Is a very well written story, with a nice rythm and very readable and enjoyable. For me, I only would add some more graphical descriptions on some situations. It seems that the turmoil of scenes sometimes makes them too brief, the author passes by them just with a couple of phrases, when those scenes could be much more enjoyable if developed in more detail (i.e. the breeding with the afgan greyhound). My compliments about this story, I enjoyed it a lot (9/10)
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- Replied by:
woolfighter
(Edit) (Jul 12, 2006)
- Yes, you are right. Some scenes are too brief, but like this I try keep up the rhythm.
Thx for reviewing.
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BigCat
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Aug 3, 2005 |
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Wonderful concept. Wild story. Keep at it. (8/10)
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woolfighter
(Edit) (Aug 4, 2005)
- Thanks, I hope my inspiration will turn back to write some chapters more.
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| Reviewer:
WildCat
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Jul 29, 2005 |
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Great writing that suits the mood and content of the story. Rarely found in Internet fiction. Some lovely ideas too! Keep it up. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
woolfighter
(Edit) (Jul 29, 2005)
- Thanks for your kind words. I write for you to enjoy and I do if you do.
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| Reviewer:
Satan_Klaus
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Jul 27, 2005 |
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School teachers, spanish donkeys and humiliation are certainly a top turnon. However, while the overall concept is nice, I find it somewhat lacking in the execution.
You try to make the story "believable" by introducing a framework of blackmail and local political power. However many of the actions in your story are so far off that it does not keep up the suspension of disbelief. In my opinion you should either make the action more believable or cut down on the "explaining"; trying to explain things gets the reader thinking and if he does he will stumble over the logic flaws. If you don't try explain the why's and how's of a not so realistic story it's much easier to accept. (6/10)
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- Replied by:
woolfighter
(Edit) (Jul 27, 2005)
- Well perhaps you are right, but I just try to keep in touch with reality. Thx for reviewing.
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| Reviewer:
La Toya
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Jul 20, 2005 |
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First I hope the writer updates this more often. Second, a little more detail would be nice. I can understand that its hard to find the right mix to make everone happy. You have a great story going here. (8/10)
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- Replied by:
woolfighter
(Edit) (Jul 21, 2005)
- Between the perfect detailing and boring the reader is a very small gap, and I prefer do wrong on the less-detail side. Thx for you review.
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Jul 20, 2005 |
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The story is real good and keeps getting better, please continue to add to it but add more often (9/10)
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- Replied by:
woolfighter
(Edit) (Jul 21, 2005)
- I promise IŽll try.
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Dododecapod
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Jun 27, 2005 |
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Not bad. More description would be nice; what did anyone look like? Spelling and gramar could use work; so could your pacing. (6/10)
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- Replied by:
woolfighter
(Edit) (Jun 28, 2005)
- Thx for your review. I'm always afraid of too many exlanations, but it seems I overdo the contrary
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Breannefun
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Jun 27, 2005 |
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I thought this was a fun little story that certainly whetted my appetite. I've always loved stories with wooden horses in them...I guess its just a perverted fantasy of mine. Anyway...I really enjoyed this one. As for critique..well same stuff as the other reviewers have mentioned. (8/10)
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- Replied by:
woolfighter
(Edit) (Jun 28, 2005)
- That's the right spirit; read and enjoy. Thx for reviewing.
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| Reviewer:
Ruby
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Jun 26, 2005 |
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An NC tale of torture that could have been made better by lingering on the various deeds of the students, the reactions of the teachers and the students, and providing more descriptions of the actions taking place. (7/10)
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- Replied by:
woolfighter
(Edit) (Jun 28, 2005)
- Yeah, its difficult to know the point between boring the reader with details and starving him. Thx for reviewing.
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| Reviewer:
Blue_Monday
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Jun 25, 2005 |
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I confess that I rate this story highly because it appeals to my own tastes--humiliation, blackmail, public demeaning, and, my No. 1 fantasy, the "Spanish Donkey!"
If I had a wish for the story, it would be that it were longer. I would like to read a bit further back, when the teacher was describing the Spanish Donkey to her students--an interesting way for her to describe her own forthcoming torture in great detail. I would also like to read more from "inside" the minds of the teachers being abused--how they fought with their own arousal as they were tormented and humiliated.
Finally, the way you ended the story, referring to a "Harem," whetted my appetite for more! This reads a lot like a prequel... will there be more?
Overall, the subject matter will give me sweet dreams tonight, as I entertain myself by filling in all the delicious details! (8/10)
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- Replied by:
woolfighter
(Edit) (Jun 28, 2005)
- You've got the point. Let your fantasy reach where the story fails and enjoy it.
I've a difficulty in finishing stories but this one I think needs a sequel, let's see. Thx
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| Reviewer:
lex ludite
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Jun 25, 2005 |
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How interesting; it's been exactly one year since the author posted to the site. He certainly has not lost any of his marvelous imagination, and he continues to gain a better command of his second language. Although this is a well worn plot, he puts just enough spin, or should I say english on it, to make it almost sound fresh. This reader recommends this story highly, especially to those authors who still can't write two coherent sentences back to back. In passing it behoves the author to do a better job of editing his material, there are areas where the breakdown in writing discipline cannot be attributed to language difficulties. (7/10)
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- Replied by:
woolfighter
(Edit) (Jun 25, 2005)
- Thanks a lot for your accurate opinion. Just to say English is not my second but my third language. I try really hard to hide this, but it's not easy.
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| Reviewer:
chksng19
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Jun 25, 2005 |
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A fun story, with many opportunities for sequels. You do, however, need an English-speaking editor. The errors are distracting. (8/10)
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- Replied by:
woolfighter
(Edit) (Jun 25, 2005)
- Sorry for the errors. I myself dislike stories with errors, funny isn't it?
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