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Then Two
Author: David
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(Added on Mar 2, 2006)
(This month 50254 readers) (Total 60886 readers) |
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A married couple who lead part time D/s life decide to spice things up a little with the addition of another sub. |
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| Reviewer:
Millie
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Aug 22, 2006 |
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The idea was good, as is your other story but you are let down by poor presentation. There are sections where you have two people speaking to each other but there are no gaps, no speech marks, nothing to make this obvious. It spoils the flow and is very distracting. Getting someone to proofread for you would prevent this from happening. (7/10)
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