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Punishment Day
Author: David l
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(Added on Apr 25, 2006)
(This month 67812 readers) (Total 83435 readers) |
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A beautiful white woman is a convict at a slave labor prison for women. She is to be punished for not meeting her quota as a plow horse. |
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Average (?):  (4.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
La Toya
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Apr 28, 2006 |
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I agree with the others who have already reviewed this story. (4/10)
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| Reviewer:
willman
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Apr 27, 2006 |
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No detail, no eroticism, no development
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| Reviewer:
jip
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Apr 26, 2006 |
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Agree with previous reviewer that the story is a little "cheap". No details, character etc. It gives more the impression to be a article in the newpaper relating a miscellaneous fact. (4/10)
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| Reviewer:
chksng19
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Apr 25, 2006 |
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Not a real story, only a fragment. While it is well written in many ways, it could use some steps through the mind of the victim, more expository writing, more character. We have no idea who the victim is.
This piece could become a story, if you wish to expand it. (5/10)
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