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The Torment of The Bridal Party Author: dr_midnite
(Added on Jul 14, 2007) (This month 77500 readers) (Total 112535 readers)
A bridal party is kidnapped and trained as slaves by Master LC

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Weighed Average (?): (6.5/10)
Average Rating: (6.5/10)
Highest Rating: (8/10)
Lowest Rating: (2/10)

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Reviewer: mkemse (Edit) Rating: Jan 3, 2008
the main problem i had with the story is that it is 1 long paragraph making it almost impossible to read, and the font size is to big but you have agood premise for a story here just need work
Despite this, I hope you addd more chapters to it real soon (7/10)

Reviewer: JonMaddux (Edit) Rating: Jul 24, 2007
I enjoyed the resevoir dogs style to it but like the others the long paragraph was hell on my A.D.D. My writing isnt so great i dont think so i dont typically beat anyone up on grammer but if you can at least break it up a little so if i lose my place i can come back to it quicker it would help. (8/10)

Reviewer: kristycumslut (Edit) Rating: Jul 21, 2007
This is a good story but still needs work I can not wait till the next chapter (8/10)

Reviewer: Razor7826 (Edit) Rating: Jul 15, 2007
The story is one giant wall of text with bad or missing punctuation. A decent premise, but without polished writing skills it is almost unreadable. (2/10)

Reviewer: chksng19 (Edit) Rating: Jul 15, 2007
Doc, the story was good, and set the stage for many acts to follow. The most major concern with the tale is that you are REALLY into run-on sentences. When they get to more than three sections joined by commas, begin to worry. It would really make for easier reading if you were to fix that. Not to mention higher scores. (7/10)

Reviewer: castle2001 (Edit) Rating: Jul 14, 2007
Good story line. The writing could be improved but that will not stop me from reading further chapters. (7/10)

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