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The Runaway
Author: DemonX
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(Added on Mar 27, 2008)
(This month 48764 readers) (Total 60911 readers) |
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Young girl seeks help from the father of her friend - only to find herself prey for his vengeance. |
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Average (?):  (7/10) |
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| Reviewer:
jep33
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Nov 1, 2008 |
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Overall, I thought the author displayed a talent to put words together. If English is his/her second language then I commend the author for having a better command of language and grammar than many who claim English as their primary language.
There were a few words spelled so poorly that they destroyed a sentence. For example, “Mark gave her a light slab into the face.” I assume the author meant to use the word “slap” instead of “slab”. Another example, “ . . . and shacked her head roughly . . .” I assume here that the author intended to use the word “shook” instead of “shacked”.
I liked the development of the characters that set the tone for their moods. However, I thought the buildup did not have a payoff that was worthy of the overall journey.
But, again, I give credit for the author’s ability to string words together. I think there are good stories within this ability that are waiting to get out.
(8/10)
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| Reviewer:
Mad Lews
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Apr 7, 2008 |
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I'd agree you were mistreated by grinner666. For spelling all I could find was the use of dept. for debt, loose for lose, and perhaps frizzle for sizzle (depending on if the eggs were burnt,)
I also suspect English may not be your first language because of some word choices. If that's the case you deserve a higher score from me. I'd suggest having a friend proof read your stories before posting just as a general rule to catch any minor glitches.
This is a fine story and the problems are very minor. (8/10)
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- Replied by:
DemonX
(Edit) (Apr 13, 2008)
- Hi,
you're right - English is not my first language. So I really thank you for your review and your hints.
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| Reviewer:
texanpauline
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Mar 29, 2008 |
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Unfair review by grinner666, I think. Spelling and grammar are OK. Actually not a bad story at all. Not really my thing, but good rating appropriate. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
DemonX
(Edit) (Apr 6, 2008)
- Thank you. I really appreciate your comment
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| Reviewer:
grinner666
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Mar 28, 2008 |
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Three words: Learn. To. Spell. (3/10)
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- Replied by:
DemonX
(Edit) (Apr 6, 2008)
- Thanks for the comment. Would be much more helpful if you would also include examples of my mistakes - so that I can learn and improve.
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