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The Thrown
Author: BDSM_London
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(Added on Mar 1, 2009)
(This month 49567 readers) (Total 57924 readers) |
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Jayne\'s home made thrown gets puts in most embaressing situation of her life |
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Average (?):  (5.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
Dryhill
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Mar 16, 2010 |
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I would have given this story a higher rating if the editing had been better and a little more about the charaters.
However an enjoyable story that has promise for several more chapters. Are you intending to follow this as a straight lesbian story or a D/s one?
Watch your editing but DO keep writing. (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
vampmaster
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Mar 4, 2009 |
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I liked it but is kind of short at times... never the less i recomend it. (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
J_stevens0n
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Mar 3, 2009 |
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Only about 1/3 of women orgasm through penetration. This is a believable story, but just barely. (6/10)
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SensoryOverlord
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Mar 3, 2009 |
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You'd almost get points for the novelty of your idea - a porn story by and for illiterates. But not quite. I'm so annoyed! A title so odd it promised creativity, turned out to be just an incredibly stupid goof. Repeated over and over. (2/10)
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| Reviewer:
Rocky
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Mar 2, 2009 |
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Sorry, but the title itself turned me off. As the other reviewers have said, the correct term is "throne." The numerous other spelling, grammar and sentence structure errors caused me to focus more on your writing skills and less on the story. I suggest you edit and re-submit as a revised story. (3/10)
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| Reviewer:
Major Littmann
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Mar 2, 2009 |
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Very good story, I think there is wrong spellink for throne which is what the engelish call the can but I cannot say it worried me, I hope to read more (8/10)
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JimmyJump
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Mar 1, 2009 |
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Thrown comes from the verb "to throw", while the chair used for bums of a higher echelon is a "throne", so, pretty fucking please, get a dictionary.
Story isn't bad per sé, but when constantly confronted with the utter stupidity of that flagrant error, it's hard to keep behaving in a mild-mannered fashion.
I'd say, "back to start", but it's too late now, isn't it.
JJ (4/10)
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