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Average (?):  (6.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
JimmyJump
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Oct 6, 2010 |
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Formatting sucks. But it's not slavegirlemily's doing, rather the site which doesn't seems to accept some pre-formatted lay-outs... I copied the story to notepad and the original formatting was right there, with neat paragraphs and indentations. Glorious!
Okay. So far, so good.
"A New Member" starts off pretty good, to go South a couple of paragraphs in (when emily starts wandering off, doing too much explaining about online stuff and technicalities) to get back on the right track once the explanatory paragraph is done away with.
The writing is solid (bar a few sentences which seem to have been written backwards), the imagination is alluring an the storytelling is captivating.
"A New Member..." would be an over-the-top romp, if not for slavegirlemily's accuracy in setting a certain mood, due to the right choice of words.
Thus, the created atmosphere gives the tale a rather sinister overtone, an overtone which serves the story well.
Great writing and storytelling.
JJ (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
slavegirlemily
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Jan 5, 2010 |
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sorry about the formatting, i suppose that will teach me to try and format the stories for html beforehand they looked fine editing in word. if you want to read the originals, well on my blog that is go to http://mistressslavegirlfantasies.blogspot.com/ & http://goreankajiratavernslut.blogspot.com/
and sorry about the & i quite like them though
as for being a native speaker i guess my gorean to english translator is broken again i must get Master to fix it.
I am British & this is how i type English, sorry
slavegirlemily (5/10)
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