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General Chen`s White Torture Slave
Author: arrakur
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(Added on Jan 28, 2010)
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nothing original about this: white American millionaire daughter gets kidnapped by pirates and soon afterwards finds herself a prisoner of General Chen, the dictator of a fictional Asian island state. a ruthless dictator, in fact. with a strong taste for white women and fiendish sex-tortures. |
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| Reviewer:
Alana22
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Feb 11, 2012 |
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HOT and well-written. Thank you for sharing. I especially loved Chapter 4. (9/10)
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ashley_craves_cruel
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Jun 3, 2010 |
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Savagely, beautifully cruel. The effect he has on the girl is tangible. I understood her sensations. Oh God, did I. (9/10)
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Edsel
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Mar 11, 2010 |
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Good story. I like the background which give it enough verisimilitude to draw you into the setting. The details and description make this one work. (9/10)
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nayamo
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Feb 3, 2010 |
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Great job with this story, I look forward to more. Well written, and very hot. Keep up the good work. :) (9/10)
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- Replied by:
arrakur
(Edit) (Feb 3, 2010)
- thank you. next installment is a pure "rape and torture" segment in general chenīs torture chamber. i hope you will like it.
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| Reviewer:
Mr. Willit
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Feb 3, 2010 |
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Blocks of text are annoying. Could have used another proof. And why is chapter 3 almost devoid of sex or boobies? I really don't care about what General so and so did as a young boy. I understand you want a back story, but it shouldn't be 75% of your story. (6/10)
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- Replied by:
arrakur
(Edit) (Feb 3, 2010)
- i will work on improving my writing in terms of grammar and other glitches.
chapter 3 has more plot than sex and boobs, i agree. but it paves the way for the following chapters with less plot and more rape and torture.
i wrote a more substantial backstory for the general (and in the first chapter for the heroine) because i wanted to make it clear that he always was and always will be a sadistic bastard by his own making. pure evil.
thank you for your criticism. i value it as much as praise, because i want to improve my writing, constantly.
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| Reviewer:
CrazedDog
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Jan 31, 2010 |
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Gripping. Looking forward to the next installments. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
arrakur
(Edit) (Feb 3, 2010)
- thank you. hope you like the next installment (submitted a few days ago) as well.
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kemosabe
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Jan 30, 2010 |
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Very well done. The plot is revealed gradually with suspense and a lot of sex. Can't wait to see what happens to the rescue couple when they also fall into the handws of the General. Hurry up with the next installments, please! (9/10)
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- Replied by:
arrakur
(Edit) (Feb 3, 2010)
- thank you very much. glad you like it, so far.
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