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The excellent restaurant temples
Author: Rotneb
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(Added on Apr 21, 2010)
(This month 55616 readers) (Total 64848 readers) |
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Bettina tries to be naked sushi platter at The Sushi Temple, but her sex dreams go to a dinner for her family in The Gourmet Temple when she will celebrate her student exam. |
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Average (?):  (5.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
Spitman
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Feb 8, 2011 |
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I agree with Michael247 about the grammar. Like most of Rotneb's writing it takes concentration to liberate the art from its packaging. However it is an extraordinary and dramatic story, with a powerfully erotic description of a spitroasting, from the perspective of the girl, who has decided to surrender herself for the pleasure of her family. Like most well written stories, the plot works well and the character of the girl rings true in her cultural context. If the author would like some help with putting some of his work into English that would make for easier reading, it would be worth the effort. (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
Michael247
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Apr 27, 2010 |
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This story was very difficult to rate. I liked the plot and even managed to read it all the way through. However it was apparent immediately that this story wasn't written in English, at least not originally. In fact, I get the feeling it was probably in Japanese and someone ran it through a Google Translator. And like many translators the AI program didn't do a really good job. The grammar is atrocious with so many wrong words here and there that its amazing this is even posted. *** That said I kind of liked it. I'm not a huge fan of snuff stories, but I really enjoy everything up the actual butchering stuff. This was a turn on for me. I really can't give the author any particular advice, except maybe to get a co-writer who could help interpret your work into something more readable. (3/10)
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