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No More Lies Author: Carlos
(Added on May 25, 2010) (This month 63891 readers) (Total 86069 readers)
Victoria betrays her married lover because she feels unappreciated. She lies to preserve their relationship. When Carlos finally has proof that she is a lier, she manges to enslave him and make him suffer only like a scorned and cruel woman can..

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Reviewer: robertahunt (Edit) Rating: May 27, 2010
Good setup, let's see how it develops! (7/10)

Reviewer: XNeedUX (Edit) Rating: May 27, 2010
Nice job (10/10)
Replied by: carlosm (Edit) (May 27, 2010)
Thank you. I am glad that you enjoyed it

Reviewer: DomBob (Edit) Rating: May 26, 2010
Way too much bouncing around and I get lost trying to understand did things go on for days or years? Several paragraphs could be removed without affecting the story. (It is almost like too-much back story too soon.)
I also do not feel that the first-person author is really a submissive with statements like "I decided to end the relationship". He should be more ... tentative and over-whelmed. Instead of whining about his needs not being met, it would be better if Victoria subjects him to more and more abuse because he wont leave his family for her.
The scene details gets mixed in huge paragraphs that dont give me any feel for Victoria, whats going on, etc. Many spelling errors add to the confusion. (4/10)

Reviewer: kinkcrazy (Edit) Rating: May 26, 2010
Needs work on the grammar and also on transitions from one scene to the next (7/10)

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