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Average (?):  (9/10) |
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| Reviewer:
butterfly_broken
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Jul 24, 2016 |
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Amazingly good! Really well written so it was a pleasure to read -- little spelling mistakes here and there didn't bother me at all because it did such a fantastic job of explaining what was happening and even better, how it felt. I could have lived without the dog part, but even that kind of worked because there was such a strong series of degrading steps to Shannon's descent into slavery, so very easy to feel and connect to. Superb. (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
gilgamekk
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May 30, 2015 |
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Detailed and long, with consistent writing quality. (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
willowspirit
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Sep 10, 2012 |
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The grammar isn't as bad as what the author implied is was going to be. Simple, but not bad at all. (The mother peaked into her room...it should have been "peeked". A "peak" is the high point of something, like a mountain top or being at climax.)
This story is worth continuing. Please finish the tale.
It is also a very good story for newbies to Internet chatting and online dating sites to read as to how to aviod trouble. (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
graymangazer
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Jun 30, 2012 |
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good start, very belieable.
your english is very good and this story could stand as a warning to any young woman tempted to fool around on the web, but then where would we be without women like this.
keep it up and I look forward to reading more. (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
tyronesmash
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Jun 29, 2012 |
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One of the best BDSM stories ever posted. Great step-by-step account of a young girl's road to slavery. He almost makes it seem that this kind of thing really happens. I understand that making the girl 18 makes it "legal", but it would be a little more plausible if the girl was 13 or 14. An older girl isn't likely to be that dumb.
This is a traditional "white slavery" story where the girl ends up in a foreign country. This kind of thing may happen but it is not as common as fantasy writers would lead us to believe. However, there is a form of "white slavery" that is common. Every year thousands of young white girls become owned by black pimps who then sell their holes at enormous profit. Most of them are probably runaways. Some are dumb girls who think that they are having sex for their boyfriends and end up on the streets. Some are actually kidnapped. Once in the clutches of the pimps, they are just as enslaved as Shannon. It would be nice to see the author try his hand at some of these stories (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
little Peaches
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Jun 22, 2012 |
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Very good start with the story, it closely relates to when I first started chatting online...in dark chat rooms.... before I had a webcam... I took pictures of myself with a digital camera to share with total strangers (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
SubmissiveWoman
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Jun 13, 2012 |
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Your story was very, very good and I really enjoyed righting it. I can't wait for another part if there is another part coming out. keep it up :D (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
Curtis
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Jun 11, 2012 |
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Your English is fine. Your story is better. You're right that Shannon is not smart. (9/10)
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